DP Flash Fiction: The Biggest Loser

This week’s Weekly Writing Challenge from the Daily Post ~ write a 300-word story or a 6-word story. I chose the easier one 😉 


The contestants filed into the sales office for the final weigh-in. Chatter pervaded the room as the final surviving 15 lined up before the digital scale.

Kimmie gave a sardonic smile as she surveyed the room.

“Easy-peasy,” she thought.”I’m so ready for this! I will be this year’s Biggest Loser!”

They didn’t call her “Bulldog” for nothing. Kimmie was the most competitive person in sales. She hit her target each quarter and outdid herself each one after that. She had won more sales awards than anyone else there.

One prize that eluded her every time, however, was the title of “Biggest Loser”. Every single year Andrea Cummings, the receptionist, won the prize. And she wasn’t even in sales!

Weight loss

 

Kimmie was tall and of average build. She may have been athletic in her youth, but 2 pregnancies and 15 years had changed all that. Still, she looked good for her age.

But Kimmie had a plan. She knew each person’s weight loss based on the previous weigh in and how much weight she had to lose to have the highest percentage weight loss. She drank vegetable smoothies, she ran, lifted weights, and did hot yoga. She was determined to win.

The final two to be weighed were Andrea and Kim. Andrea went first. 130 lbs. She had lost 20 lbs! 13% of her original body weight.

Kimmie’s face fell. She had also lost 20 lbs, but that was 12% of her original body weight. She needed to have lost another pound to be the clear winner.

One more pound and she’d be “Biggest Loser”! If not, that cow, Andrea, would win the trophy and the $1000 prize AGAIN!  Kimmie refused to lose because of one lousy pound.

“One sec!” she yelled, when it was her turn.

She reached across the desk, grabbed the scissors, and began chopping off her long hair. Two pounds – gone!

18 replies

    • Thanks for reading! Haha! No I cannot guarantee it has never happened. People have done very odd things to lose weight and also for money. Can’t imagine what some people would not do when both are at stake 🙂

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  1. I love the humane quality to your writing. I had empathy for the receptionist. I have just discovered your blog and enjoying my visit. Look forward to reading more of your posts.

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  2. Great one!…You really nailed Kimmie’s competative drive, one you see so often with sales people. Very convincing character you put down in merely 300 words!;)

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  3. Whew, I was worried what she might do when she grabbed those scissors! I honestly thought this story might turn gruesome! I’m pleasantly surprised! This was very engaging and suspenseful. Next time I’m frowning at the scale, maybe I’ll give myself a haircut. 🙂

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